I like this very much. It is a nice inspiring story that’s takes you on the journey through human desire, need, and then the gratification of supply. A few formatting adjustments would make it easier to read.
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story - you captured the despair while leaving hope for God's mercy. This story could also be seen as an allegory in our time of need...p;]
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This was making me nervous because I thought that the people would not get the water then they would all die.
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but you still have a story there.
You need to break your long narrative up into several paragraphs. Not only will it make it easier for the reader, I think it will add even more dramatic effect to the story.
A nice effort.
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You flatter me. Saying you like it best out of all the books you have read. Untrue, but still, very flattering. thanks.
Judy, yes... apparently, according to my fan club... I can write ANYTHING and it is never bad (not true, but okay...). more flattery. I think I may start forming those smile lines... lol.
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Sweet! You do have a nice touch with the short story genre, you know. It's good to see you exploring the extent of your talents. =D
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it was really good, i really liked it, it was my favorite of all the books i have read. thanx to jazz for the book
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Like Lisa said....nice to read something a bit different from your usual dark style.
I liked this story because it shows not only the drought but I can encompass all of man's woes. And yet it also showed that after all there was always that hope.
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yeah, my s button on my keyboard at home isn't working well... I need to repalce it soon I think... Thanks. I will see if I can fix that now.
Also, thank you for the kind comment. I should be putting 2 more up today. The two I am putting up are the first two I have ever written (short-story-wise) and I wrote them on monday and Tuesday of this week. LOL.
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