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Review - I would have to agree with the others that even at 10 you already have a voice and a feel for telling a story. You wrote of pain and family angst well. Keep writing, keep practicing. You are going to do quite well. Robynn

If you're writing as brilliant as this at 10 years old, I believe you will have a career in writing.
I agree with all of the appraisals, but another a tip I would suggest when using dialogue is to start a new line each time a different character speaks. This makes it easier for the reader.
Please let us know when part 2 is posted.
Best wishes,
Chris

Find it hard to believe you are only 10
very well done You need to pull it out a little but I see you have a follow up coming. Look forward to it

Dont worry, there is a part 2 of this book when Maria's life changes from bad to wonderful.