The Shadows We Hide

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The Shadows We Hide
Ivy was a human girl with a dark past until she transformed in to a Freak. A human with supernatural powers. Follow her on her journey of poverty, murder, and friendship.

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alyanna

Wow its so awesome, i jus finished it. your going to write more right? Cuase i dont like if it ends like that.i liked how it was kind of like X-Men. i love X-Men. Wolf-wolverine. Magenta-Rouge. haha its over all pretty good. (: i like how Ryder is crazy, you really made him seem crazy some people cant really do that they make it cheesy and it sucks. Yours was good, he was all scadder brained and talked to himself. (:

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insert.name.here.

Thank you and yes, X-Men was my inspiration. I'm not going to leave it like that. It wasn't finished. I should be finishing it soon :-)

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scottkelly

"it was good."
Not exactly feedback :-\ hah. Shame on you.

I'll try and supply some feedback as I work my way down the story. I was immediately pretty psyched to see what kind of story this was going to be, I don't see well-crafted fiction enough around here. So right off the bat... impressive.

A few things I've noticed: You mention it's Ivy's 15th birthday, but then point out that the birthday before that one was when she... mehr anzeigen

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insert.name.here.

Oh, Geeze. We need more people like you =P
This is my first story so it was kind of testing the waters, y'know?
Thank you for pointing everything out. It will really help me with my next story. :-)
The part where I list the powers didn't really seem right with me either but I... mehr anzeigen

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