BookRix

Nice. When does the next book come out?

a nice read,as said you need to tidy it up a bit. There is nothing major, look forward to more.

You have a good start for an interesting story set in an unusual setting. Refinement in your sentence structure and grammar will make this story shine. Robynn

I like the book, but there were a few errors in the format. A few times, after periods, there weren't spaces before you starteed the next word. Also, you need to make a new paraggraph and put it in quotations when someone begins to speak. I hope this helps.
I definatley will read the next chapter when it comes. :)