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Thank you for pointing that out to me, I have always thought something was odd when i re-read it myself from time to time, it never registered, I see what you mean after going back to look at it once I read your comments, I intend to go back and change that, thanks for the good eye, and I am pleased you are enjoying this book, soon I will add some more chapters, this book though is far from finished, is still work in... mehr anzeigen
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Jackie,
I just finished reading the first 10 chapters and really enjoyed the dialog and banter exchange... the flow of the book really takes off until page 20 when you jumped out of first person and became an observer I found it distrating.
This happens again on pg. 26 at the begining of Chapter 5 and thruought the remaining chapters...
On page 28 the girls just appear as does the food no explanation but later on you explain... mehr anzeigen
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