Hi Jack,
As usual you never fail to please and this is just one more notch in your belt of fantastic flash fiction. Excellent story - short and not so sweet. May I offer one suggestion? Use the word "overpowering" rather than "overbearing" -- that's it! Everything else was perfection.
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I am beginning to love flash fiction, especially yours. Your description of the bus station is so right on that I could see the gum stuck to his shoe. I could see your character at the end as he spoke to his friend, and could imagine him winking.
I had no idea what was coming great twist.
This was a pleasure to read.
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I actually felt sorry for the poor beggar (lol).
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Jack, you seem to have an endless imagination. Another great story with a twist that brings a smile.
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Jack, your flash fictions never fail to make me smile. Excellent writing combined with a masterful twist. Always a great job!
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Excellent!
Voted...just kidding. But I would have if it was in a contest.
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