The call

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The call
Living in a house full of boys never bothered Ida. She liked it better than the dull and lifeless home she was used to in the Summers. The first snow was the welcoming call for the boys to WoodRo mansion. However, this year none of them were prepared for the events that would unfold; it's not just mere training anymore. Their magic, their families, their lives are on the line.

Ian and Lyall have a rough start from the beginning but it seems that it was all planned by fate for them to be born enemies. Where does Ida fit in all of this chaos?


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  • Veröffentlichung: 10.11.2013
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Rgabel
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Rgabel

So good to see you back to writing again Hima! You have grown so much and your writing is maturing as well. This is such a seed of a story. So much you could do with it. I'm curious as to where it is going. As Laz said, there are some grammar errors, but I can see and hear your voice. Your natural need and talent to tell a story. Keep it up. Finish it. I'm looking forward to reading the finished product.

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Godd story so far. A few grammatical errors.
Also I looked up an article concerning the lack of INDEFINATE and DEFINATE ARTICLES in the Eastern Indian English language...such as 'a', 'an', 'the', and so forth.
Anyway...the story has promise. Keep it going.

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lazarus67
lazarus67

Oh...you should explain why there are boys coming there to stay.

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