are you going to be writing more to this story please let me know
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I love reading your writing. You have such a fantastic imagination and these stories seem to flow from you with ease. I also know you are struggling with a second language but sometimes the mistakes you make give me such a laugh. Pg 25, you need a 't' to the word 'ear'. Otherwise he has an 'ear' rolling down his cheek! I had to read that one twice! I also loved the phrase, "jerk off her laziness". Outside of the spelling and... mehr anzeigen
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The font is much better. It makes a good story, in which you have, ./joeparente
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You will need to write more so I can get an idea of your story. So far so good with some spelling issues. I would change the font to a more standardized form./joeparente
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Interesting thus far...a lot of questions need answering.
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The story so far read is beautiful,go ahead.
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