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Great sample. I am actually compelled to buying it this weekend just to find out what happens. The beginning is very strong and grasps the reader immediately. Amazing work.

Meli

Wonderful. I honestly enjoyed this book. It was captivating with every turn of the page. I wanted to read more! For a sample it explained alot and I like that. Your detailing was magnificent. I consider this a work of art. :)

Not usually into romance, but this is a pretty good book!

How does one decide who to love? Can we help ourselves? These two mismatched lovers, broken, torn.

Yet who is the stronger one, the one who will forgive and continue to love through the emotional pain until finally able to walk away? The one who only wants a safe haven and knows the boundary between the physical and emotional aspects of love and the ability to recognize the limitation of her ability to give what the other needs?

In the end it does not matter for they both end up broken.

Again, I am feeling lucky to be reading such talented authors. The prose was vivid, grammar correct, no punctuations mishaps, a lot of white space, maintenance of POV, and best of all, a complete story.

Gwen

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I like the fact that you chose to put the man in the broken hearted position. You feel sorry for him while hoping he will come up with the strength to send her packing and he did! It was an emotional read.

in thirty short pages! Awesome. I wanted to know what happened and kept "turning the pages".

You can write a good romance, take your time and flesh out a nice long one, you can do it! I'll be buying your book next!

A truly excellent book. You once again astound all with your amazing ability at writing. You should write more.

Love and hugs.

~Jazz

Good read. I forgot I was at school while reading it :)
Poor Scott. I felt bad for him. And you made him out to be so perfect. I fell in love with him myself.
He should have told her he was going to quit and live for her only and they would be poor to she what she did :3

~Edan <3

I enjoyed your story, you really got me involved. I was telling Scott what a fool he was, glad I was alone while reading it. You have my vote.

But very true. I think everyone has been in a relationship where they have forgiven the other...over and over, despite their transgressions.

And on the flip side, the inability of the woman to overcome her emotional failings, and the resulting disaster for herself--one that she is destined to repeat--is just as sad.

Very well written, and very depressing on more than one level, which means you've succeeded in writing a very good story.