BookRix

You're going to continue this, yes? Very well told. I'm sure, since this is the beginning of a new story, you're going to get into editing it later, so I won't go into detail about the issues with tense. The story itself is compelling, its progression paced exactly right, and the mystery that has begun to unfold is tantalizing. So...you're going to continue this, yes?

I'm going to add it to my favorites so I can keep current with the updates. If there are no updates, I will find out where you live and send my puppy to cute you into submission - submission of the rest of the story, that is, hahaha!

Er, sorry [clears throat].

'D