the resurrection

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the resurrection
a man getting tired of his monotonous life chucks it all up. looking for some excitement he deserts his family, leaves his job and wanders off aimlessly. will he find the excitement he is looking for or will it bring realization of another sort?

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rebekahjennings

Hi Gurpartap,

It's good to see you've written another piece. I've had a short look at present and have some suggestions for you.

Pg 1: ...I had been working, surrounded by the usual sounds of the telephone ringing impertinently, impatiently; sentences thrown at each other across the hall; peals of laughter, machines whirring... I'm not sure the adverbs 'impertinently' and 'impatiently' are necessary here. Also, you've begun the... mehr anzeigen

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joeparente

I really enjoyed your story. You are a talented author and this one could be made into a novel. The book needs a cover. Perhaps the painting of the wife would be the one. It's your choice of course../joeparente

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