letting go

a family story Von:
User: gskhairah
letting go
A middle-aged couple is devastated by the death of their young son. The tragedy threatens their own relationship. Will it cleave their relation or bring them closer?

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leshea

What a sad story. It makes you think of all the people in life who are going through the death of a loved one. I'm glad it had as happy of an ending as possible. It is well written and has my vote. Keep up the good work.

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tina2010

The content of the story is good. But I suggest that you include a cover page to make it more attractive. You can just go to the "Edit Book" mode. I am sure that this will help you gain more votes.
I will vote for this too.
Best Regards

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daviddonch

Dear gurpartap singh,

Your writing drew me very deeply into the hearts and minds of your characters. I felt what they felt... the depths of their sorrow, as well as their loving relief from the hopeless anguish of their troubled relationship. This, in my humble opinion, is what good writing does.

That being said, I'd like to share, if you don't mind, a couple of observations.

At times, I noticed what I felt was an overuse of... mehr anzeigen

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librarian

Thank you for participating in our short
story writing contest "Family Stories".

The Librarian

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mirandabm

What a moving story, and so well written. Unfortunately you've entered the competition very late so probably not many people will read it. Good writing though - Joe says you deserve a vote: I give you one.

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joeparente

Excellent account of the death of the son.Very well written. Only one suggestion: the transition from the narrative to the diary could have been smoother. You deserve a vote for your writing./joeparente

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