There are some very nice things about this short story, among them the building of your two main characters, and the plot building you employed. I too liked the very surprising twist ending; the way you took us down the staircase expecting one thing, and then...:) "A thrilling curiosity took Pelle." Excellent, your use of thrilling instead of simply curiosity without a compelling adjective like thrilling:) Very visual.
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A couple of strange and dangerous characters for sure! Enjoyed the twist.
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That's impressive
Well done, Greta
Must admit: I was a bit sad that the police caught them in the end. But, then again, I guess they deserved it.
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really good thriller. I loved the twist at the end.
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very interesting but confusing in the end.
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amazing short story really enjoyed it. Im just a little confused at the end lol. Where did there plan go wrong. Keep on writing im loving your stories
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The story is quite interesting and suspenseful towards the end. To bad it's a short.
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Hi, Greta. I liked the flow of the story. It raises the readers' curiosity until the very end. Keep on writing.
Love, Iolanda
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