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Treavor scoggins

I love this keep righting more I love this

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I think you need to get someone who knows both your language and English extremely well, because a lot of this doesn't make any sense whatsoever. I get the general idea, but many of the words you use are totally incorrect and have no meaning in the context of the sentence in which they're used.

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I think you need to get someone who knows both your language and English extremely well, because a lot of this doesn't make any sense whatsoever. I get the general idea, but many of the words you use are totally incorrect and have no meaning in the context of the sentence in which they're used.

You might also want to consider the fact that the deepest love we feel begins with deep respect and true friendship, not with sexual attraction and lust. That's part of it, but not the most important part, so if you want to give advice to people about developing a true, deep love, don't suggest that it starts with behaving like mindless animals. And why are you only talking about the way girls should make themselves attractive? Any guy worth getting to know isn't going to be the one who insists that the way she dresses has to get him sexually excited. That's horribly insulting and suggests that sex is all a girl is really good for. What about the things guys should do? Like take a bath and use deodorant, or keep themselves clean and well-groomed? Girls don't like slobs any more than guys do. Of course, you can't tell a guy to let his little thingy hang out, so why tell a girl she should be flashing some boob? Really?

Look. If you want to write a book about relationships, talk about the things that SHOULD attract people to each other - their minds, their personalities, their sense of humor or even seriousness, honesty, kindness, all the things that make relationships last. A lot of gratuitous sex is definitely not "how to love deeply." Then again, maybe that's all you mean by "deeply." If this is just a book about how to have great sex, you'd better fix the English, because there are already hundreds of extremely well-written books out there on the subject that use comprehensible language. No one will read something they don't understand. Good luck - and please get this edited if you want anyone to take it seriously. I mean that in a good way; I'm not trying to discourage you, only help.