reading my story and your comments
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Please tell me the minor errors so I can check for myself and thanks for reading the story.
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a side from some minor errors it was a short and good read, I think you painted an excellent picture of a hungry tiger.
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I liked the description of the mother and daughter relationship wrapped tightly into the story with an easy description of what it is and why without going into long and needless paragraphs about it.
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well done from the tigers perspective I felt so sorry for the deer but thats the way of it
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I submitted it for the animal competition but it came back refuesed (I had neglected to see the contristions of 300 words). They offered me to cut it down. I am afraid I would have no idea how to shorten it that much and still say all that needed to be said in the story, so I... mehr anzeigen
Lovely tale. Pad and wade, hang and lap. Wonderful prose! Way to stay in the present tense, that's a hard one for me. And you really made me feel like I was in the mind of a tiger. Your description of the tiger's journey through the mangroves was very visually striking. Keep up the great work this one is definitely going in my favorites!
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So pleased you liked my Tiger. To be honest, it was a hard thing to keep in the present tense. I really had to watch my words as well as tell the story. KI am fond of it myself,you know how you like some oif yiour work but really like others
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hank you for your lovely comments? Brain going this afternoon, but when does it not, ha! If you have time, do please read Black Morning andValley People - Chuall. Valley People is the first chapter of a book. I have another chapter from another book there, Warsharee too.... mehr anzeigen
Thanks for your comments about Tiger, I loved working on the story as you had to get inside the animal's head as best you could from a human point of view.
Thanks again
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