DUSK

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DUSK

He’s always watched her; it was his family’s duty to make sure that no harm ever came to Chloe Jade and her family. They had failed her before but he made sure there would be no repetition, even if it’s the last thing he did.

 

Chloe always felt the need to look over her shoulder, like someone was watching her every move. That wasn’t normal for any person. However, she was never a normal person; bouncing from one foster home to another, without a real reason why might have been one of the reasons. On her 18th birth-year, just a week from the actual date which will bring her all the freedom she ever wanted; she learns that her life is about to make a turn towards hell. Running from people she didn’t know existed until that day and for reasons seemingly impossible for any person to comprehend, she sets out on a course that will leave her dead or…well, not dead.


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Drama, teen fiction, nanotech, friendship
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Ess

Hey everyone, sorry it took so long to update. I'm in my final year and nothing has ever been more stressful because I have to keep up with the double workload. thanks for being patient.

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judycolella

This is a good start to what promises to be a fast-paced, fascinating story! To help you make it better as you work on it, check out other books by famous authors to see how they format dialogue. You'll notice that every time a different person speaks, his or her words, along with the dialogue tags, are in a new paragraph. This makes it much easier for the reader to keep track of who is talking. When all the dialogue is in... mehr anzeigen

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Ess

Thank you so much, I need all the direction i can get. I hope you're enjoying the book

judycolella

I certainly am. It's written in one of my favorite genres. To see what I mean, take a quick look at my book "Abomination" (I'm not asking you to read it, just wanted you to take a quick glance to see that in this particular genre, we think alike!), which you can find by... mehr anzeigen

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