Lost, and Now Found

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Lost, and Now Found
Rosaline is hurting. She is found by a young man named Eric by a stream in the middle of the forest. She is covered in bruises and scratches. She is being abused, but by whom? Will Rosaline ever lose her sorrow and pain, and will she ever smile and be happy?

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cleveland

Hi
I;ve read your first two pages and congratulations.
I could say a thousand diffent things but you've only launched into chapter 1 of your book. Besides you are 15 and it takes courage o start off a book.
What I'd suggest is one important thing and hat is to introduce a lead, a fresh lead very early in the story.
Here is Eric. To make him more interesting perhaps he has lost his left hand in a battle and is fitted wit an... mehr anzeigen

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