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Good story, I like the book, and there is another best book to read is The Perfect Author, you can read it on http://theperfectauthor.in Really mind blowing, worth to read.

The story seems interesting, but like the other readers said, your story needs to be longer explaining how exactly did Pinkie start the fire in the first place, you know like a story.
What you wrote seemed more like a summary, also separate the narrating text from the character dialogs and add more punctuation marks.
I am saying all this because I want to help you.
I also wrote a book about ponies if you would like to read it here is the link:

http://www.bookrix.com/_ebook-mihaela-bogdan-mlp-fim/

Hope we can become good friends. Brohoof!

to improve you should write more and explain. also use correct punctuations because I couldn't tell when they were talking

you have a nice idea here
needs to be filled out a little more
Try to bring your characters to life a brief discription of each pony.
what are there markings
are they sweet or moody
let us know them

involve your readers so they will start to care and you will have a much improved story

well done so far

I like the book but maby you could make it longer. like tell why the candle fell, why did she need a candle any way? and where was she when it happend was she even at her house?Oh i almost forgot keep up the good work.