BookRix

Good start. Liked how you have only a few spelling errors. You open with a dream, then move on into the day. A first chapter always needs some tension, something that grabs your reader and makes them want to know more and read on. Though losing a grandma is sad, it still isn't tension. You start tension well with the obnoxious boyfriend, but a whole page has gone by in the meantime. Think about opening with the boyfriend. You have plenty of time to introduce sis and some of the sad back history.
But this is just my opinion. I like your writing style and it shows you have done your best work. Keep writing! Robynn

yes there will be thanxx

You have done a good job on this story..Will there be more?