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Words are the begining and the everything. A smile is a welcome and the pain is the beauty that makes us. I may be that wolf with wool over my eyes, but I see you Ellie. I always will. You can Lie and you can cheat me, but ill always be here even though I can't BE THERE. You are you and dont let anyone change that. You are strong and beautiful (handsom) and any girl, even me, is really lucky to have you. I love you Ellie (like a friend or more). I just hope you stay....

alright thanks man I'll make those changes...again thanks for the feedback

In The End: Its a nice start to the collection of poems, the only problem I have with it is the second line. “ I death” is unnecessary and confuses the reader, so I suggest removing it altogether, it won’t really affect anything in a negative way.
Beautiful part 1:
In this the biggest issue I see is “I saw pit with you in” This sounds very awkward, try something like: A pit with in you, or I saw pity with in you
So yeah my favorite poem out of them all was Things, overall you did a good job :) One piece of advice I feel necessary to give you is to always read through everything you write multiple times, and to read it out loud.

Why thanks you

Beautiful poems. I loved them:)