I had a feeling of where this was going by how you wrote "he says"
I like it, esp the cover. Nice story tho....
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Very imaginative--and eerie. Nicely done.
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Thank you!
This is Emma I hope you'll except my friend request! and your book is really good!!! It's kinda scary but it's the kind of scary that makes you want to read more!
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love the ending , hope you'll write more
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Thanks :)
Excellent!
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Thanks :)
Good writing. Surprise ending. Loved it.
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Thank you :D
Nicely written, Eva.
Pg 3, capitalize the 'he' after "I'm awake."
Pg 4 you need to add a 'y' in 'palms sweaty'. Same page, 'we comes straight back' there's an extra s.
Pg 6 capitalize the 't' of 'the voice says'.
Pg 7 same thing, 'the group advances' and 'the voice is firm' capitalize 't'.
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Thank you!
I thought that after dialogue you aren't supposed to capitalize it?
It's true if you put a comma, but you have a period. After a period you need to capitalize. Or change it into a comma.
I want to know where did you get an inspiration for this story ? :/
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I sent you a PM so that I wouldn't give the plot line away for everyone :)
Okay...got that! :)
I like it:)
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Thanks :)
Woah! Fantastic job! Great story, well told, and keeps the reader guessing - thinking - I suspected what this might be about, but wan't sure, and then the end twist, and the discovery that my assumptions were wrong. Woo-hoo! I love it when I get surprised like that by a well-crafted plot twist!
Okay, not saying any more - don't want to spoil it for others. ')
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Judy and I aren't so easy to please (lol)...so, it's you who deserves all the praise.
I second that one, Laz!
I just happened on the ending of this story and found it fascinating...so...I reread it from the start. It is thought provoking. It brings you into a world which most of us cannot imagine...well, almost. Enjoyed reading it again.