the lonely

Von:
the lonely
There were three of them.

Joshua, Brenna, and Landon. 'The trio,' is what they liked to call themselves. But things aren't always as they seem.

-NOT OFFICIAL COVER. ALL RIGHTS GO TO RESPECTIVE OWNERS-

Beiträge und Kommentare
Wichtiger Beitrag
J. M. Rivers

I had a feeling of where this was going by how you wrote "he says"

I like it, esp the cover. Nice story tho....

2 Kommentare
Dieser Kommentar wurde gelöscht.
Wichtiger Beitrag
gospellover12

This is Emma I hope you'll except my friend request! and your book is really good!!! It's kinda scary but it's the kind of scary that makes you want to read more!

Wichtiger Beitrag
Gelöschter User

Nicely written, Eva.

Pg 3, capitalize the 'he' after "I'm awake."
Pg 4 you need to add a 'y' in 'palms sweaty'. Same page, 'we comes straight back' there's an extra s.
Pg 6 capitalize the 't' of 'the voice says'.
Pg 7 same thing, 'the group advances' and 'the voice is firm' capitalize 't'.

2 Kommentare
E.K. Perkins

Thank you!

I thought that after dialogue you aren't supposed to capitalize it?

Gelöschter User

It's true if you put a comma, but you have a period. After a period you need to capitalize. Or change it into a comma.

Wichtiger Beitrag
Gelöschter User

I want to know where did you get an inspiration for this story ? :/

2 Kommentare
E.K. Perkins

I sent you a PM so that I wouldn't give the plot line away for everyone :)

Gelöschter User

Okay...got that! :)

Wichtiger Beitrag
judycolella

Woah! Fantastic job! Great story, well told, and keeps the reader guessing - thinking - I suspected what this might be about, but wan't sure, and then the end twist, and the discovery that my assumptions were wrong. Woo-hoo! I love it when I get surprised like that by a well-crafted plot twist!

Okay, not saying any more - don't want to spoil it for others. ')

lazarus67

Judy and I aren't so easy to please (lol)...so, it's you who deserves all the praise.

judycolella

I second that one, Laz!

lazarus67

I just happened on the ending of this story and found it fascinating...so...I reread it from the start. It is thought provoking. It brings you into a world which most of us cannot imagine...well, almost. Enjoyed reading it again.

Um eine optimale Funktionsweise zu gewährleisten, verwendet unsere Website Cookies. Durch die Nutzung der Website stimmst Du der Verwendung von Cookies zu. Mehr Infos
OK
Top of page
Kein Miniaturbild Entfernen Bitte wähle einen Grund aus Bitte gib die Stelle im Buch an. de de_DE