The Mad Lover

a flash fiction Von:
The Mad Lover
He was her best friend, with her in all those good times and bad times...she loved him as a friend and he always managed to bring a smile on her face.

But when she saw him that day, she couldn't help it as hatred crept over her, hatred and fright...
She knew he wasn't her same best friend forever but her MAD LOVER...

(998 words)


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Glynis Rankin

Another very well written story and one that could be made into a longer book. Sereni gave you some good advice, but the over all story was wonderful. Suspense was maintain throughout. Really a good job.
Yes, I voted. Keep up the good work.

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sereni

When you write your blurb you want to give the reader a peek at your story. It’s important to have correct spelling. Sometimes I have even taken a small part of my story for the blurb. I must admit at your age I don’t know if I would have written stories, and posted them so bravo for you.
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His smiles, always reminded me of spring- (no capitals for) sparkling colors, flowers and pleasant weather. But today, when he... mehr anzeigen

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S.P. Johnson Jr.

This was a good story in that it was direct. No effort was wasted in trying to force a twist or mystery, and it was better for it.

Some of the verb modifiers should be switched around, and a few of the verbs were a bit off, i.e. when in flight the main character "marched" down the stairs.

A quick tip for your blurb, if you're short on the character count, you can fill it out with all spaces.

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felixthecat

I must say, there was a high degree of tension throughout this story! Overall, a very good effort, and a nice wrap up at the end.

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Kalai

You were able to maintain suspense from the beginning to the end. Good read!

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