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This was a chilling story. A great example of a sad situation. You did a good job convincing me, until the very end. Great story.

Bravo!

However, I do have one critique:

In my opinion, the words themselves should be strong enough to stand by themselves. There is no need to CAPITALIZE EVERY LETTER IN A WORD just to emphasize them. The exclamation point is all you need ;)

Otherwise, amazing job. It was a sad story and a good example of fear.

Great job!
Keep writing!

---RbG

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Chris

that scared me.........

when everyone keeps telling you you're insane. :)

Two young women, high school aged, close to me have hung themselves. Kinda makes me wonder, now, if they too were experiencing the horror you described.

An intriguing story.

All my best!

are a true artist. I love this story and your description of Schizophrenia made me realize what those people must go through. It was an eye opener to read. Truly a winner in my book.

To me, it felt a bit confusing and rushed.
The idea is a very good one but the presentation was a bit disappointing. Also, I found it difficult to read because of the tiny font.

You have a good start there but from my point of view you should work a bit more.

Just my humble opinion.

This was INSANE! I loved it and at first I understood that something was up with that girl but the ending just brought everything together so well.
Your details were very good, You slowly gave us the info as to "twin" not actually being real, which was great since it added so much to the suspense.
you did a great job on this story.
-Angely

it was good

Schizophrenia has always haunted my mind? You captured the fear and insanity perfectly!