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I like the name Zarhia, it's pretty. The story has a good start, but you need some editing chica. If you care to, I will be happy to edit it for you. But despite that, it's a good start. It's fast pace. I think you should work on some character development though

i got confuses with this book

nice book

i love it

your story is really intense! it made me scared and sad all at once.

can you have somebody edit it for you? just to fix the grammar and spelling mistakes because it's kind of distracting and takes away from how good your story is and makes it seem like it's jumping around.

i was confused about when you say "daddy, where's mom" when you wake up in the hospital, but you cant' be talking to your dad because he shot himself, you know? it's a bit confusing.

let me know when you write more - i want to know what will happennnnn!

*adding to favorites*
one small suggestion? You should add some punctuation to your blurb so it's not a run-on sentence. Example: "Za'Rhia isn't your average teenager. Her life has been changed so much, but only she can change it for the good. Will she take a chance a happiness or will she crack under pressure?" Hope that helps :)