BookRix

Im working on the first book of the series

Thankk you so much

Gosh that is deep, really I can't wait for more. Keep it real girl!

so are you going to write more I'll be really looking forward to the ending!!!!could remined me of love a bok written in the same tone

Ok thankk you veryy much , i will definaly do that

Thankk you very much and yea i do use very violent words but its just to express where the characters are and hwere there from

Thankk you very much and yea i do use very violent words but its just to express where the characters are and hwere there from

You have the story's world clear in your head. i can tell. now you just need the best order of words to show it to others.

the choice of words is a common problem. (including for me)

also try to avoid "plague words"

(writing is like painting... the only difference is your canvass is another dude's head.)

Follow the advice of the two below me. Also, try to show more than tell. Example the 'Beep Beep' of the mobile phone you could have said, "The mobile beeped. Reese looked at the device and saw a message from Trinity. A malicious smile curved his lips. "Aye Sapphire, she's coming. Gimme my pants."

Try not to over do the swearing. A word thrown in here and there is enough.

Thank you very much i will definally do :)