The Third of...

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The Third of...
The story of a vicious life changing event that started with the kidnapping of a dog and culminates with a shooting. The aftermath is frightenig.


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scouts

Thanks Robyn. I am putting things down as they happen. Then I will edit to work on the formatting and the grammar. It will take a while as the wheels move slow but here it seems it almost at at stand still.

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Rgabel

Review - It is horrifying to think that our justice system moves so slowly that it protects those who so blatantly steal.

You did very well in building the character of this person in the beginning with just a few descriptions.

Though you had a bit of a problem with formatting, overall you kept the story moving in a chronological order. You built the tension well, and expressed the feelings of fear, frustration and longing... mehr anzeigen

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scouts

We will see. It will be a while and you know how the legal system works. In the end we may lose the dog. but if it comes to a hearing of ownership well the judge will decide. there will some more posted on thursday. Thanks Laz.

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scouts

Glad you want to read it. There will be more posted really soon. I have time constraints and it maked working on this a slow process but check often,

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lazarus67

Sounds so tragic...I hope by the time you finish this story, everything will have turned out well.

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kimmyj79

I think you have a great start:) There are a few errors but nothing that stops me from being able to read it..I am just learning myself, but I think you have a great start with this and I would love to see what else has happened..
Kimmy

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