Angels On Earth

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Angels On Earth

 Nagato Honda is an orphan and she lives in a tent on a property that belongs to a rich family, but when they find her living in the tent, they let her live with them, when a landslide happens and smashes into the tent, she goes into histeria! What will happen to Nagato?



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Love, Drama, Family
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Lorian Lilsiel

Good story line, really promising. Just some basic grammar and spelling stuff, nothing nobody else doesn't have. One thing though, you might want to tone down the exclamation marks. They loose meaning if every sentence ends in one. Some parts seem to move a little fast, or just not sound right. Nothing a little re-reading can't fix. Some parts get confusing. For example, it is possible I missed it, but what is the amethyst... mehr anzeigen

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Daisuke

Thank You For Your and I will make the improvements
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