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Love it. Maybe after the competition you could carry this on a bit longer.
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John
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It's always really hard to imagine the death of a child - especially for a parent. I can't even begin to imagine what it would be like. Although you story is quite short, it was well written and filled with emotions.
Nicely done!
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I am more of a person for happy endings, but in the loss of a loved one this can never happen. The emotions were very well portrayed. I felt the pain with the woman. Still I would have hoped for a less tragic ending. Perhaps you could continue the story, with something stopping the woman from doing what you imply she is about to do.
Very well written.
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As a mom, I almost couldn't read it. But I did. And I gave you a tear-streaked vote.
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And what a point is it. Dealing is one of hardest things and eveyone deals differently. Nice work.
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Still not my favorite genre, but I still feel you did this quite well. So, you get my vote. Robynn
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Don't tell me she did what I think she did?
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Over all, this is a good story. My only issues with it are, 1: The second paragraph seems to sputter. Read it out loud and you'll see what I mean. Part of that is attributed to 2: the line "I felt I needed closure." When writing in 1st person, it is a redundancy to say "I felt" or "I saw" because the reader is already aware that the POV is that of the narrator. A line like that pulls the reader away from the intimate... mehr anzeigen
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Nothing.
oh okay
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