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Hey I'll add more soon. I've beeen so busy that I haven't been able to write. I will add more asap. :)

Thank you. I'll add more soon. I didn't mean it to be underlined, I keep meanng to fix that. I'll let you know when I have more. I really appericate the feedback. Sorry for the misspelled words, I'm terrible at spelling.

Very interesting premise. It's kind of like "Oliver Twist" with homeless girls instead of street waifs. There were a few spelling errors (no biggie) and one misused word ("suppressed" instead of "surprised" on page 21), but overall it was very engaging. You get the reader to care about your character right away, while creating plot twists and conflict easily. This is an excellent start! I'm just curious, though - did you mean for the text to be underlined throughout? I actually like it, since it makes the whole thing feel like a diary. Anyway, good writing, good imagination, good job! I look forward to reading more. :D

Thanks. I really apperciate the feedback.

You have a great beginning here. Keeps your interest, dialog is good. Good job. Robynn

It's not finished yet. sorry