Emergence

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Emergence
The Empire of Twelve is locked in a civil war.

Xaosian armies invade the planet Raan, destroying much of the capital as the military, led by General Trexor, try in vain to defend the city of Tapal. Soon after, the Xaosians make a power-play against the Empire which will see the Twelve thrown into chaos.

The planet Narcsia is dying. Storms and quakes claim the planet, threatening to wipe out all life on it. The only hope for the residents is Evacuation Day, but Xaosian forces are closing in on the doomed world.

But none of this matters in the grand scheme of things; something deadly has emerged from the Empire's dark and deadly past, and it wants revenge against those who damned its kind. But when history is written by the victors, who knows who this being's target will be?

The Empire was founded on dark secrets... and all are about to be brought to light.

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science fiction, war, action, adventure
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judycolella

This starts well - after enough of an introduction of the main character to catch the reader's interest, and a brief explanation of where this is taking place, the story explodes into raw action. Excellent way to begin any sci-fi in my opinion.

As far as the writing goes, it is far more comprehensible than a lot of what I'm asked to read here - your spelling and grammar are fine with a few minor exceptions. However, there are... mehr anzeigen

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Chris Harris

Thanks for the advice :) I'll definitely get round to getting it edited properly when it's all done

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