More Than A Memory

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More Than A Memory

All too soon though, his eyes got cloudy, and his grip on my hand loosened. He closed his eyes so that I wouldn’t see his pain, but the smile never left his face. His breathing slowed until it just stopped completely and I couldn’t hold back anymore.


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Rgabel

Review - You did an awesome job of showing these last moments between two people with the interplay of shared moments in their lives. It was done perfectly, with just the write amount of joy balancing the grief. Wonderful job. Robynn

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mutter8

Words can't describe how well you did on this. I almost cried over it. You did a wonderful job and should deffinitely continue writing. Good luck to you.

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yezall

When a writer can evoke emotion from a reader its a job well done. The purpose would be to tell a story, fact or fiction, to make the reader feel as if it were happening to them.

The descriptions in this book are not of the surroundings. Through words in a dialogue I felt the emotions of these people. The writer also gave a peek into her thoughts, which added so much to the overall effect of this book. Only having 10 pages,... mehr anzeigen

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yezall

I felt the pain, the bitter-sweetness of it. You did a wonderful job of expressing this moment.

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