My Survival Island

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User: caeli2435
My Survival Island
I have never been stuck on an island but have read much about it. I wanted to pour out the facts of being stranded on an island. i would love to have a pet wolf.

This is dedicated to
Zane v.
For helping me all the way through!

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NJ

Nice work, Caeli! NJ

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NJ

I hope you're still writing.

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robbedbygreed

Great job! I had fun reading this.
I do have some critiques thought:

First of all, you should make sure you don't keep slipping between past and present-tense. There are a couple of words that are out of place. And watch your punctuation and spelling. Sometimes you make mistakes.

I love the concept of the story and all the information you used. However, you do end up just listing everything that goes on, so I feel none of the... mehr anzeigen

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