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Loved this little piece. An amusing and unexpected take on the great ceremony!

I tend to like short stories more than their longer brethren. A short forces the writer to balance what he wants to say against what there's room for, to be vivid yet concise. The end result is usually something I can only describe as literary candy--it never fills you up but it certainly tastes good going down the hatch.

That said, the first sentence didn't seem to be punctuated right. I would have used a colon after "I've never seen the place so busy..." to better relate the two thoughts. Had that been the third sentence, I probably wouldn't be mentioning it, but the first sentence, like it or not, is usually the one people will love or crucify you for.

The details about the show are what really sell this story for me. For the most part, they seem like they're there to be interesting rather than to simply perpetuate the ambiance, as might be tempting in a short like this. The part about the stand-ins testing out the clothes was my favorite; I had never thought about that but now that I do it seems obvious. A part that didn't work as well was the part about the hummer. It just seemed a little too heavy-handed and irrelevant.

The description pertaining to the auditorium itself was spot on. I also liked the fact that he didn't have sound in his earpiece--it gave it a everythings-in-the-works kind of vibe. Who knew a rehearsal could be so entertaining?

Enjoyable read! Don't hesitate to say that the ending kept me wanting to read more than there was to read!

Thank you for a well told story. Short, slick, beautiful ending, and very self assured.

I am new to Bookrix, and if I find many more like this, will have to write and thank Miranda for introducing me to it !

Sreela

I appreciated your comments on my submission so was anxious to read yours. Beautifully written and very professional in that it flowed, was amusing, grammatically correct and entertaining. I think you have an excellent chance with this piece and I hope to read more of your work. I respect your opinions and would definitely enjoy receiving feedback on my ongoing memoirs, FEAST, FAMINE, FULFILLMENT. Good luck and thanks for a great read. Valerie

...of Hollywood. Fake everything! :)
Very nicely done brian!

Best of luck to you,
Robin

Yes, I enjoyed the moment in the life of a stand-in at the Academy Awards.

Would love more of the story, too!

Hi Brian,

A very well-written submission! You did an excellent job at letting the reader see through the eyes of a presenter. I would have liked to read more, only because it was such an enjoyable and effortless read, but at the same time I think you ended perfectly.

Good luck,
Incognito

was so enjoyable! I so love your writing style and your ability to share events leading up to the Academies so realistically! It is wonderful, Brian!

Good luck in the contest, Brian! Petra :))