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Framingham, MA
All their buildings are constructed around the trees on their land, they say.
And the pictures back their words. They don't scream environmentalism from the
roof tops but practice it. I am not a religious person but I applaud and
salute their vision and commitment.
Every disciplined way of life has some nugget of wisdom that all of us can
benefit from. I see developers and even individual home builders thoughtlessly
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This is a good story, but you need to do some editing. Have you proof-read this? If so, you might want to try reading it out loud. As writers, our mind are always in auto-correct mode, meaning we'll see a mistake but automatically correct it before it even registers as a typo or error. Because of that, we gloss right over it, and when someone point it out we're like, "How did I miss that?" But when you read out loud, you're... mehr anzeigen
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i appreciate all the advise you gave me. I have had my hubby read it every now and then but he is not telling me about all of that. I will proof read soon
Excellent story arc - I've read your latest posting and enjoyed it. A quick note about idioms: the correct expression is "all of a sudden," not "all the sudden." Also, be careful not to switch tenses. Other than that, great stuff! I look forward to the next part!
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