BookRix

Yes, I am in the preparation stage, also before I start I am trying to digest your corrections in the first one so as to avoid doing them on the second. The second one will be during a war that took place in Nibiru, in earlier times that Under the Warmth of the Sun, and it is a little darker.

Yes, I did notice the new connections in chapter 3. It adds to the story. And yes, the names of the chapters are also a very nice addition to the story. And remember, the story itself is excellent. You do a great job of creating a very complex plot in very subtle ways.

Thanks a lot :) I really do appreciate your effort in correcting my mistakes, I am going through it chapter by chapter correcting as you send me emails. THANKS and I am writing a new story now, and am careful to use all the stuff I learn from you early on. I think you will be proud of me, I am a good student :)

No problem my friend.

Excellent, thank you, you encourage me :) Now I am working a bit on Nola.

Thanks :) I am working on it over and over, correcting and adding more to the story itself. Do you still hate Brent?? I am trying to make him nicer in the new version.

Actually, after reading what I read in the story yesterday, it is not Brant who has to change, but Nola. That's all I am going to say without giving the story away. Nicer! Look what he did for Nola--how can that not be nice?

Wow, thanks for the compliment, coming from someone whose writing is so very good, it is big for me, thanks :) I have a few things in my life that is occupying me a little right now, but although very slowly, I am going through each chapter carefully and trying to correct all your comments, and trying to give more strength to the language itself, which is the really very difficult part for me. Again thank you thank you thank you :)

Take your time. I will finish reading the story and wait until you post the edited chapters. I'll go through them one by one and do a more thorough editing job.

first of all, I would like to thank you for your constructive feedback, iit is kinds of difficult to find someone to edit my work who is a native speaker and at the same time interested in stuff like that. You got it right though most of my mistakes is that English is not my first language, so when I'm using a word, I find myself wondering if it is the right word to use, and that limits my ability to write good stuff. I actually appreciate any feedback, and I don't consider any kind of feedback as harsh as long as it will help me improve my writing Thanks for taking the time :)

I think if you put out a request in Serious Writers, Better Writers, or any one of the groups like that here with more advanced authors as members, you'll be able to find someone who both enjoys that genre and has the time to work with you. It's worth a try - your story deserves that attention and appreciation.

Thanks, I'll check those groups, thank you for your time and advice