BookRix

Thank you so much!

Good story...liked the twist at the end.
Voted.

I just fixed the formatting. Please let me know if you see any other problems. Thanks!

The formatting for Bookrix was different than mine so it changed the whole way it loaded, which I realize is a huge problem because if I were reading this, I'd be annoyed. But I'll work on fixing this, thanks
As for the story, it was definitely rushed, but the contest it was entered in had a word limit. I usually write completely different stories, too, so this was a push outside my comfort zone. I would upload a mystery story I'm writing, because it's definitely better than this story but its still in progress and I'm entering that one in a different contest.

The story is interesting, although a bit hurried. Your writing is good.

I'm curious to know why it's formatted the way it is. A paragraph every two sentences.