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I know adults who can't form sentences as well as you do! Cute story, believable, easy to read. All around nice job! The only other thing I can say is spend some time with the next one, make it longer,

sweet story! I was a bit amazed that someone your age has done so well. Good, tight little plot...well-edited in the main. You're going to do just fine in the wide-open future of writing ahead of you.

I liked it. :) What a cute ending. There were a few typos, but the heart of the pieces was really well-thought out.

thank you all, Im glad you like it

A good effort for a young writer. You have made an excellent start and I look forward to watching you grow as a writer.

that glace truly is all it takes to 'take' - p