BookRix

This is the first book of yours that I've read and it's really well written. I started reading it just to get an idea about your writing and then couldn't stop for one second until it was finished. It really flows from one page to the next. I just wanted to let you know that on page 30 there is a small mistake that should read "the white bone of his knuckles beneath" instead of "knuckled".
I'm excited to read more of your books!

I'm obsessed with "Obsession". One of my favorite works. I like reading dark and twisted stories like this. Keeps me looking out the window for inspiration. The coverart is very eye catching. Let me in on how ya do it>MamaP. :D

A well-crafted story complete with an eerie beginning, a heart-thumping climax and a satisfying ending. The plus point of this story was the air of realness surrounding the theme, and you maintained it well. There were a few points though which made this piece just short of perfect.

Firstly, though Lawrence was convicted, without a confession or the body or a motive(which the Box of Secrets would have revealed, if found by the cops) any professional lawyer could have saved him from a death penalty by arguing that the evidence(strand of hair, boot marks) were only circumstantial. God knows, if the lawyer was competent enough, Lawence could have been acquitted for lack of strong evidence. I read a lot of law crime novels(John Grisham), so this came to my notice. I hardly expect any reader will notice, and that's a good thing in itself. Except for that, Bill's sudden transition of heart from killing himself to escaping seemed a bit rushed. But as they say, all's well that ends well. And you have my vote!

Bonne chance!

~Prakash

Nicely crafted and... well...

I have an old, very trustworthy, friend named Bill and you've made we wonder about the depth of love and what true friendship means.

It's a testament to your piece when you can set an old man pondering such things.

The settings are made tangible by your descriptions and the story has a solid amount of truth in it.

Really Grade-A work. My vote's in.

As soon as I finished reading this, I was planning my comment, which was to be, "Ooh, creepy!" Then I saw Val's and laughed. Guess that means the effect this story has is so well-established that it isn't unique to any one reader. That's quite a feat. And very Stephen King-ish. You really built your characters well, engaging the reader instantly with a combination of hints, suggestions, and promises of something irresistible and dark. I found myself thinking Lawrence could easily be a sad widower or something looking for a new love to replace the one he lost, only to find (and quickly realize) that in a sense, that's exactly what he was doing, but in a very sick way. So all I can say is, "Wow!" This effort is magnificent, and I applaud you for taking what could also be easily made into a full-length novel, and compressing it into a tight, emotion-packed and very scary short story told with incredible skill. I also give you my vote!

really good :) i really like tht. Bill is 1 hellva friend. but LAwrence. dude es messed up. really clever ow ya thought of it :)

That was very creepy, Beth. You wrote it well and I was definitely hanging on to your every word. Glad old Bill got away in the end. Great job.

Wow what a great story, I couldn't stop reading till I finished, you had me following your every word. I wanted someone to catch him before it was too late .
I wondered where you have been, but there is no need to ask you what you've been doing.