Ahh indeed life is hard, but all the more satisfying when luck and passion are on your side! ... Although I could do with some of that magic about now. Cheers for the vote mate!
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Tough...being an optimist, I was hoping for a more positive ending. But, alas, that is life.
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When I hear stories of divorce it always seems to be these 2 people out 2 hurt each other but here its different. Good story
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Interesting short fiction. Did notic a tendency for telling not showing. And plenty of back story that in a longer work might disappear to another part to be brought out at the correct time. Also you need to consider what characters are 'main' and what are 'lesser.'
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Hi, thanks for the feedback. Flash fiction is always hard when getting the balance of character and plot. I'll take note of your comments. Thanks for reading.
Ben :-)
You did display a lot of emotion in this story. I had a feeling a dawn the story would have continued. I wondered if this wasn't a piece of a larger story. This was a good read. Good Luck!
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Cheers mate! Sometimes I take a snapshot of a characters life and it can often feel maybe too big for the format. I sometimes bring these characters into my other works, in a kind of cameo role. I'm writing a novel at the moment where a button man from one of my earlier shorts... mehr anzeigen
Thank you! It's good to be back! Hopefully they will sort the contest system - they seem to be having some problems at the moment.
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You've managed to convey that kick in the gut that divorce serves - hopefully only good writing not recounting...p
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Hello Ben, it's nice to 'meet' you. Your story is good -- as one who has been through this, I can say you've captured the essence very well. It's nice to see that the man has equally felt the pain ...
Very nice job!
CJ
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Thanks CJ, I appreciate your comments and I'm so glad you liked it. It is often hard to convey such strong emotions in writing and harder to attach then to believable characters. I hope I went some way to achieving this.
Thanks again.
Ben