I think this is weird. Why would some random army appear out of the middle of nowhere without Alice seeing it? Where's Jacob? Why do they want Renesmee if they know that they can't turn her into a drone? She's not blood-crazy. Why would Carlisle have to change her if she stops aging around 17/18, with most of the powers other vampires have? There are a lot of questions to be answered, along with a lot of grammatical errors.... mehr anzeigen
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there are a few problems to your story, already, and I only read the first paragraph so far. first off if this is a continuation of the twilight saga then you should stick to the main story line as far as the characteristics of cullens and so on. In the twilight saga in states that Renesmee doesn't smell like a human. and It also says that they wouldn't be able to change her because of her chromosomes, it would kill her.... mehr anzeigen
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she is right.
there are a few problems to your story, already, and I only read the first paragraph so far. first off if this is a continuation of the twilight saga then you should stick to the main story line as far as the characteristics of cullens and so on. In the twilight saga in states that Renesmee doesn't smell like a human. and It also says that they wouldn't be able to change her because of her chromosomes, it would kill her.... mehr anzeigen
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there were just a few missed spelled words but still nice, please remember that colored paper is hard to read off of
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wow that is cool but i love warewolves more than vampires but they are cool dont you think it is painfulllllllllllllll mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
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ok try some of my others if you didnt like this one
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