BookRix

You've picked a truly relevant theme; the conflict between the father's concern for his sons education and the sons natural desires to enjoy their youth.
It is a universal theme, but (I know) especially relevant in a country like India where there is great deal of educational competition.
I loved the way the father talks about 'your sons' whenever he has a complaint; a very realistic touch.
Somebody has already suggested that you edit it.
I cannot vote for you as I've already used my vote elsewhere.
Best wishes.
bettyc

Hi Avisek,

I liked your story. I think it's great the way you capture the position of both mum and dad. Also, you've managed to show differences in personality for the boys. Well done!

The work needs re editing, firstly for spelling errors and grammar but, I also notice some wording that is out of place in English text. I wonder if having a friend who's first language is English, may help you with some of those small difficulties.

Your text would be more pleasing to the eye and better for the readers concentration, if you broke up your text into smaller paragraphs.

I like the idea of the boys and dad having dreams to help them see things from the others perspective.

Bek :)

Nice story....and undoubtedly true for maximum bengali families....

I could relate to each sentiment in your story...

Nice work keep it up....

Voted....

Thank you for participating in our short
story writing contest "Family Stories".

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