It doesn't have much of a plot, and it doesn't grab your attention. IO think you need to work on those two aspects.
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Well done but some work is needed for flow.
Great presentation. Perhaps titles instead of chaptering would help the flow that these need./joeparente
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U hav a passionate heart.The saying words express more than saying is true,wen i read ur buk.
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