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I made it up lol
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Did you write this or is it an old ledgand, its very ggod, what grabeyard is it???
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Good job I enjoyed it but few things you could do to make it better is add dialogue, a story doesn't need dialogue to be good but it's something to think about and wish you could of said why she was amazed at the sight of blood.
You could of did a good back story maybe something in the family or something
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