Promises (EDITING)

Its about a girl and a guy meet and hates their life for it. warning does curse Von:
User: Auli D.
Promises  (EDITING)
hey guys this is my first book and tell me if i should continue and make the rest of the book I hope it was good well i will be glad to hear form you!

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vampiers, werewolfs, mates, romance
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Patricia Montclair

I love the premise of your book, with all due respect, you are telling the story instead of showing it. There are a number of filter words in each paragraph which needs to be reworked. Adverb usage does not add much to fiction and is considered bad writing.
I think this book has potential, and I am interested in reading more.

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