BookRix

Very Interesting. I like it! A nice cutesy story :)

However, I do have several critiques:

Logan and Anne's names are used to often. Switch it up with a 'she' or 'her' sometimes.

It would be nice if you made the opening sentence a paragraph in itself. And though that is technically incorrect, I still think that it would make the story flow better.

Also, you could combine several of the sentences, as you begin to fall into the 'listing' way of writing and repeat the same words several times in a row.

And your punctuation isn't bad, but it needs some work. I'd suggest going over the what you've written yourself and editing.

One last thing. With dialogue, you should make a new line every time the speaking changes.

But good job :) Keep writing!

---RbG

...I don't know what happened there!!
I am constantly amazed by you youngsters writing these stories; coming up with the notion, writing it and submitting to a competition. I am amazed and humbled by it.
On a neg note, dialogue should be written on a new line each time the speaker changes. Do that and I'll come back and review the storyline.
Also change your title to 'Water Required'. You don't need the 'is'.
Well done once again.
Wendy

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