TERMS OF THE WISH

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TERMS OF THE WISH
Robin's life begins anew when she meets a fellow named Adrian after a few months of being divorced The two fall in love but Adrian is not human and his love for her does not comply with the rules of his job, which is to grant one wish to the mortal willing to accept the terms and conditions. This forbidden love will bring into effect the worst of consequences for the two lovers and the worst part about it all is that Robin has no idea what she's gotten into.

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Romance, fantasy
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First off perhaps the print could be just a tad bigger, for those with seeing problems it’s a bit difficult to see. I like your description and overall concept just go through and edit or have a proof reader look at it there is quite a few errors. Thanks for the read ~faith

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storyteller4

As Iread this I felt like you had a great backstory written and now it seems you could write a good story. For example, it took you first 8 pages to tell about her divorce. You are doing to much telling and not enough showing. As a reader I felt as though you were explaining the plot rather than making it alive with a combination of dialogue and inner thoughts. Sometimes thoughts jumped so fast. As I read there were times I... mehr anzeigen

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gooduklady

Ark, you need to go through your book with a fine tooth comb as there were too many mistakes for me to list. For example, on the first page, you start "Her and her husband," which should be "She and her husband." They had "grown apart" not "grew apart," and so it goes on. Too many commas which are misplaced, make your sentences hard to follow. I know it is difficult for many writers to write fluidly, but it is very important... mehr anzeigen

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