BookRix

IT WAS GOOD. GREAT GRABBER/HOOK! :)

I enjoyed both Sydney and Scarlett. Both had a nice, twisted ending. Abbey looked rushed. You needed to put her father's words as dialogue.

My favorite one out of the three excerpts was the one about Sydney. While I was reading I was thinking oh no something bad is going to happen between her and this guy, but by the end I was thinking aww that's so sweet yet sad. I liked how for the excerpt on Sydney the story didn't feel rushed. However for the other two excerpts I felt like an important factor from each of their respective back stories were missing. To conclude, I thought the piece was well done for a 100 word limitation. I hope to read more from you soon :)