over to give you my vote. Good luck!!!
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I won't say why, because I don't want to give it away in case someone is reading the comments before checking out the book, lol!
You have a few glitches - your use of pronouns sometimes makes it hard to decipher who is talking and what the setting is. You also make an error that's rather common, but one that makes the difference between a story that sounds professional and one that's amateurish. I know, none of us is a... mehr anzeigen
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First of all, I love the cover! It's so pretty :)
Second of all, I really enjoyed the story. I can definitely see it being turned into something longer, especially the way it ended. I did notice a few spelling and grammar errors, but I think they're just typos. A really cute short story :)
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you are very descriptive! one small suggestion? you might want to format this book again. there are lots of line breaks, etc., where there shouldn't be. its a pretty easy fix but it would make a difference in readability.
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