The Subterranean Rodentian Tales:

The Light in Darkness Von:
The Subterranean Rodentian Tales:

Long after the human's extinction along with several other animals, those who were able to escape underground began forming their own societies. Many mimicked human empires, religions, practices, and language. However, there is trouble across the lands. The rat kingdom, most despised kingdom of all, is still under rule of a strict dictator.The new dictator is Bubonic, known for his large snout and clever tricks. However, a rebellion has broke out in order to overthrow the kingdom, led by an albino rat named Reformation. Little does he know, he just might be the light that saves everyone.

 

The book was based off of The Tale of Desperaux, but is more horrific and is suggested for teens because of its gory nature and themes, crude language, morbidness, violence, and darker style. 


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James Gerard

I like the new setting the characters are in. It sounds like an adventure is awaiting them.

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ChargeOfWar186

You are correct :) the chapter isn't quite complete yet, though.

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James Gerard

As I was reading chapter five, the though of Wind in the Willows came to mind. I think it has to do with how the two characters in this chapter interacted with one another. The dialogue was very sweet and caring. The story is coming along well.

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ChargeOfWar186

Thank you :)

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James Gerard

I like the inclusion of the mouse as a character in this chapter and how you portrayed him. Good job.

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James Gerard

Very clever play on words with "chipnun" in chapter 2. I think you did an excellent job of building up Reformation's character at the beginning of chapter 2. You are turning him into a multifaceted being with a range of emotions. Like where you are taking the story. I like a good adventure as well as fantasy.

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ChargeOfWar186

Glad you are still enjoying the book. I'll be focusing on this one mostly since I have it planned out.

The chipmunks' society was modeled after medieval nuns, monks, and priests. I had a hard time thinking about what their society would be like, so I took the word apart.

You'll... mehr anzeigen

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felixthecat

I agree with James, Andrea. You have a very easy way of fleshing out scene as well as introducing character, I might add. The beginning of a very interesting tale. Speaking of beginnings, your prologue--the basket and note tucked inside--reminds me of The Midnight Palace's opening (Carlos Ruiz Zafon). I hope you've read it:) That note holds an important key, which we, the readers, are intrigued by! We'll find out what was... mehr anzeigen

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ChargeOfWar186

Thank you! I'm glad you are enjoying the book. No, I haven't read that book, but I'll look into it :) I'll keep the dialogue tip and mind, and correct my mistakes. I've always struggled with this and the I before E rule as well, but it's not too late to fix this habit. Thank you... mehr anzeigen

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James Gerard

Very good story telling. Your characters have depth. Your theme is well-established. Good dialogue between the characters. Good job establishing tension and conflict.

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ChargeOfWar186

Thank you! This is one that I thought about for awhile, so it's planned more thoroughly than the other one.

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