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You and I, we have the same sort of style of writing poems. And what more, we both write because of the dark feelings that overcome us. When I read your poems, I was reading my own story told back to me from the eyes of another person that understands my sadness, sorrow and depression. I'd say that I enjoyed reading this, but really it echoed my whole depressing situation. Anyway, I'm glad I there's someone out there that feels the way I do.
Liz

These poems are very heartfelt and somehow I feel like I can relate to them. Its kind of like the poems speak to u. (I know, I know. Sounds insaine doesn't it.)

These poems are very heartfelt and somehow I feel like I can relate to them. Its kind of like the poems speak to u. (I know, I know. Sounds insaine doesn't it.)

Good start. There are some spelling errors. A quick read through will point them out to you./joeparente

You need to tighten up on your spelling or typing, that said, I read all but one which was too small for my eyesight. I suppise, of their kind, they are quite good but I found them too dark and disgturbing for real enjoyment. I never had a great dela of angst in my life so did not need to write about it. I hope your moof will lighten in the future and creat brighter works

You poetry speaks of such pain. My favorite was the Shadows. Yes, it seems this world is black and white, but truly it is worth living. Sometimes the pain outweighs the love, but over all, the blessings outweigh the pain. You have captured the angst of youth well. Keep writing, keeping hoping, it will get better. Robynn

Dylan Thomas said "Poetry is what makes me laugh or cry or yawn,what makes my toenails twinkle, what makes me want to do this or that or nothing."Just keep writing and watch your spelling. Serena

Hi Lonely...thank you for sharing these sad poems. Yes, I agree with unwanted. You will grow as a writer of poetry with every new work you create. If I might make a suggestion to help you along on this exciting road, and to help you garner a wider readership, begin reading the best poets' works. Study them. What kinds of images have they created with carefully chosen words? Analyze WHY a particular piece moved you. Your natural voice will take over as you contemplate these things. Don't be afraid of Shakespeare's sonnets, the works of Wordsworth or Shelley or Neruda, or the more contemporary poets. Read much. Even in sad, melancholy pieces you can choose images and the words to create them that will knock readers out!
You've done well...keep it up!

keep writing don't give up. these are really good. talk to a professional who can help you to accomplish your goal at becoming a famous well know peom writer